The fight itself was written with only specific directions as the fight choreography should be kept separate, according to my previous tutor from last term. After the monster's defeat, the scene ends with a close-up coin flip that transitions from the past scene and into the present scene in Hayato's hands. The scene then continues into the present where a team of superheroes that the elderly Hayato leads deploys to their duties as a reminder of the future that he helped to forge.
That concludes the script, but I will continue to develop the draft into its final version, and the drafts of my progress from start to finish can be found in the link below. My teacher Miss Bettina has once again brought out some comments on my script with most being compliments on certain parts and very few suggestions. She has stated "You have effectively created a detailed other world where this story takes place. Your descriptions of character are visually strong." on the world-building within the script, and "You have reached an ending for the narrative of this episode and you have set up events for the next episode here. It is good not to tie up all the ends but instead to indicate how the story will continue." on the surprise cameo of the new user of the Cross Brace in the present day at the end of the script. I am happy for these responses by my teacher and feel satisfied, but I also feel like I can improve more. I will do this by actually researching more scripts this time.
As I have stated in my posts from last term, I have looked at Writing TV Scripts by Steve Wetton for the basics on writing scripts.
Also mentioned in the aforementioned post, I used an unused draft script for the 2017 Power Rangers film, but I have since examined other scripts. At Miss Bettina's suggestion, I searched on the BBC website to search for a script and found one for the Doctor Who Series 10 episode "Oxygen", which is one of my favourites in the
season. Upon examining this script, I have seen that I have already used the standard format to writing my script, but there were some differences to the professionally-written one. In most of the "Action" sections the characters' names are written in all capitals, and more actions noted in parentheses beneath character names in the dialogue.
I will aim to add these elements to the final draft of my script and future scripts as well. I then sought out more material to study from, so my tutor Zoe suggested a website to find good examples of scripts, the link to that can also be found below. I selected one of the three screenplays to choose from under "action/adventure" to look at: The Bourne Ultimatum. The script was largely the same usual format, but it was written with ellipsis (...) throughout the more dramatic scenes alongside double dashes (--), and there were also important points in and out of dialogue that are underlined.
I found this use of punctuation to make the script itself look as exciting and suspenseful as its content, but I felt largely unsatisfied.
I then decided to review the two other screenplays under the "action/adventure" category: Lone Survivor and Aliens. The format and usage of punctuation in both scripts are standard to what I used in my script already, so I was more or less satisfied then. I will use some of these techniques to improve on my final script alongside comments from my tutors. In hindsight, I should have done this a long time ago, but I will aim to improve my final script based on these findings.
Links:
https://drive.google.com/open?id=18FKmtIy-7Gy2xkAMGlwOserhEEQNsECo
https://www.scriptreaderpro.com/screenplay-example/
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