Feedback

I have recently received feedback for my blog by a fellow classmate, Vangelis "Evan" Alexiou. I found that it is mostly positive, other than the mention of a lack of reflection and a lack of artist research, but I have already discussed my inspirations in a previous post, which should be sufficient enough. The feedback can be found below:

Feedback:
https://drive.google.com/open?id=0B8Iz7GQQYfqnQVgtTXduNFpFM1JJLVU3QkJPb1I2TTRkSm8w

Writer Inspirations

As this should have been done a while ago, I will discuss the writers who inspired me. I based my script on tokusatsu; a Japanese term for movies and shows that make heavy use of special effects and used mostly to describe live-action superhero shows such as Power Rangers, their Japanese counterpart Super Sentai, Godzilla, and many more. My script is mostly inspired by Kamen Rider, a tokusatsu show created by Toei Company, while the concept of a team-based dynamic is based on Power Rangers, an American tokusatsu series.

Pictured above are Greg Aronowitz (top) and Riku Sanjo (bottom). Greg is known for producing, directing, writing, and costume designing for Power Rangers S.P.D. and Riku Sanjo is known as the head writer of Kamen Rider W and Kamen Rider Drive. All three shows are known for their crime drama elements as the characters featured are police, detectives, or police detectives. One of my characters in my script, Cop Saver, is a police-themed superhero with a personality based on most of the protagonists written by these two, while the concept of a black market-based antagonistic force is based on the villain Broodwing from Power Rangers S.P.D. and his Krybot drones that he also sells. Riku Sanjo's Kamen Rider Drive is what most inspires me about these characters, as they are based on weapons used by the titular superhero, as well as the creator of the main protagonists based on one of the protagonists of Kamen Rider Drive.

Judd "Chip" Lynn is a well-known writer for Power Rangers who wrote for many seasons. He is the inspiration for my script's team-based dynamic as Power Rangers is known for having a team of superheroes in each season. My script also features a main team of three that typically operates together while accomplishing different tasks.

Steve Wang is a make-up artist, costume designer, and director known for Guyver: Dark Hero and Kamen Rider Dragon Knight, a well-known American adaptation of Kamen Rider Ryuki. He created a new story from the elements of Kamen Rider Ryuki while keeping the main element of mirrors and alternate dimensions. He wrote Kamen Rider Dragon Knight as a very dark show with many mysteries and serious elements such as illness, greed, and desperation, despite being aimed for children as it aired on CW Kids at the time. As such, Kamen Rider Dragon Knight can be enjoyed by children and adults alike. I aimed my script to be target to children while also being enjoyable for adults if adapted into a show by having the show become more dark, but not too dark so that the children will still be interested.

Overall, I draw mostly the themes and story these writers specialise into my story, which are the best they can do. I hope one day I would write a show as good as they can.

References:

- https://powerrangers.fandom.com/wiki/Greg_Aronowitz

- https://kamenrider.fandom.com/wiki/Riku_Sanjo

- https://powerrangers.fandom.com/wiki/Judd_Lynn

- https://www.stanwinstonschool.com/blog/steve-wang-creature-designer-director-painter

Script Format Research

I was recently given feedback on my script by my tutor regarding certain formatting points. I was advised to give more emotion to certain scenes, improving character descriptions, and to add "DAY" or "NIGHT" to my scene headings, rather than lighting conditions. I also added some personality description to my characters to give the reader some idea of how their lines are told. In class he further elaborated on the use of an intercut for a scene where it would cut back and forth between a press conference on a stage and backstage.

I searched for guides on using an intercut and found the link below.

I removed the extraneous scene headings and left the first two scene headings to show those are the scenes that are being cut in between. I then added "UNDERCUT" under transition after that. I also added acts for easier navigation of the script under my own decision. One major change that I made was the inclusion of a scene for Medic Saver.

When I started this script, I aimed to write 22 pages. When this was exceeded by factors regarding formatting, I decided to have the script have a page count close to 22 as possible. With that in mind, I added an additional scene to finish the showcase of all three of the People Savers' roles with Medic Saver's very own scene. With some minor changes to my script it should be finished soon.

References:
- https://nofilmschool.com/how-to-intercut-scenes-the-godfather